Dear Dr. William,
I agree that we all have the right to smoke. So many Americans very much feel the same way, and they choose to be a smoker (par.4). In your article “Nazi Tactics” that you wrote in August 2002 issue of Ideas on Liberty, your comparison of Nazis and anti-smokers shows that you feel that smokers are not able have the right to make a choice when it comes to smoking. “As a result of both official and non-official fraudulent claims about the health effects, as well as the health-care costs of smoking, there has been widely successful vilification of cigarette smokers and tobacco manufacturers” (par. 5). In society, the smokers are seen as villains and are victims of a huge genocide so that that the world can be safe.
Wednesday, February 24, 2010
Tuesday, February 16, 2010
Reflection 1.2
My main focus for writing my second draft was adding some more research. I figured out that I needed to be careful with the research I found because I wanted to make sure it was relevant to the paper. I also went ahead and added a direct quote from my friend in the part where I talk about my personal experiences. I feel like by adding this quote more pathos was created in my argument. I really didn’t focus on trying anything new or different in my second draft because I liked the layout of my argument, and so did my peers in my group. In my next draft I once again attempt to add as much more research and opinions as I can. I will focus on making sure that my paper is clean and understandable for my audience. I also plan on posting my works sited page in my next draft.
Sunday, February 14, 2010
Essay 1.2( No Glamour in Teen Pregnancy)
Dear Elizabeth Baugh,
On the night Lifetime premiered the original movie Pregnancy Pact viewers from every state, every college campus and every neighborhood were tuned in. Pregnancy Pact portrayed the realities of being a teen mom or basically just being a citizen of motherhood. The fact that it was inspired by a true story even made the story less glamorous; the movie screamed “these hardships can happen to you”.
In your editorial from The Breeze, I understood that you wrote A Perfectly Planned Pregnancy to claim that “Teen pregnancy was depicted as far more glamorous than it really is”. You felt that this movie was more than likely using its message to promote teen motherhood. I on the other hand, as well as many other viewers, did not see the so called glamour at all. A James Madison University student, Traffy Taylor, commented on your article stating that “everyone knows that having a baby at 15 is anything but glamorous”. Traffy Taylor disagrees with your claim based on her own view of the real world. I feel that this movie really got a true life message across to its audience.
It’s a well known fact that the rates of teen pregnancy are pretty high. MTV’s Teen Mom is a reality show that shows the trouble and hardships of a few moms that are between the ages of 16 and 19. The moms in the show are constantly dealing with problems like not receiving support from their child’s father, balancing school and motherhood, and the option of giving up their child for adoption. Common statistics state that the chances of finishing high school or college is very unlikely for teen mothers, and a large percentage of teen mothers have to apply for welfare (“Statistics on Teen Pregnancy” par.5) Almost all of these facts were directly or indirectly displayed in Pregnancy Pact , where is the glamorous life in those situations?
A huge problem that occurs in the United States is teen pregnancy. The highest rate of teen pregnancy belongs to the United States. Teen pregnancy costs over $5 billion yearly for the United States (“Teen Pregnancy Facts” Par.1). In a panic of what to do several teens go through an emotional crisis and turn to abortion or adoption. Most of the time these pregnancies are unplanned and teen’s are very unaware of the sexual education knowledge. When other teens view the unglamorous life of teen moms, they then decide to use better ways of prevention. The amount of teens giving birth have decreased over the past few decades, this is basically due “to increased availability of contraception and access to abortion, rather than a decrease in sexual activity” (“Teen pregnancy” par 1). I feel like this movie has a point of bringing about a dose of reality that can also be a part in many teen pregnancy campaigns.
I personally have friends that became moms at a young age. They always had a full plate on their hands once they became mothers. Most of them were able to finish high school but they did not get the chance to go to college, they couldn’t even take a course at a community college. Obstacles occurred when they were barely able to find jobs that they could maintain so they could support their children financially. They strongly depend on the support from their families and close friends. It’s like once they became mothers not only did their lives change, but they had to become a better person, a stronger person to be exact. My friend Shakeera Johnson told me “Motherhood seems so much easier from a far, but when you get up close and personal it’s a whole other story”. Struggles occurred constantly for a while, but they have basically gotten familiar with these hardships and responsibilities.
When many people look at movies, they kind of have a sense that less reality is going to come forth in the movie, even with movies that are based on a true story. If inspiration is to be found in the movie it can be captured in many different ways. A person can be inspired not to partake in a certain behavior in a movie, due to the consequences the movie presents. In the Lifetime presentation of Pregnancy Pact young girls are able to find inspiration in the movie. With the struggle and turmoil that the characters in the movie went through, I know many girls decided not to follow in their footsteps.
Sincerely,
Tekeya McDonald
On the night Lifetime premiered the original movie Pregnancy Pact viewers from every state, every college campus and every neighborhood were tuned in. Pregnancy Pact portrayed the realities of being a teen mom or basically just being a citizen of motherhood. The fact that it was inspired by a true story even made the story less glamorous; the movie screamed “these hardships can happen to you”.
In your editorial from The Breeze, I understood that you wrote A Perfectly Planned Pregnancy to claim that “Teen pregnancy was depicted as far more glamorous than it really is”. You felt that this movie was more than likely using its message to promote teen motherhood. I on the other hand, as well as many other viewers, did not see the so called glamour at all. A James Madison University student, Traffy Taylor, commented on your article stating that “everyone knows that having a baby at 15 is anything but glamorous”. Traffy Taylor disagrees with your claim based on her own view of the real world. I feel that this movie really got a true life message across to its audience.
It’s a well known fact that the rates of teen pregnancy are pretty high. MTV’s Teen Mom is a reality show that shows the trouble and hardships of a few moms that are between the ages of 16 and 19. The moms in the show are constantly dealing with problems like not receiving support from their child’s father, balancing school and motherhood, and the option of giving up their child for adoption. Common statistics state that the chances of finishing high school or college is very unlikely for teen mothers, and a large percentage of teen mothers have to apply for welfare (“Statistics on Teen Pregnancy” par.5) Almost all of these facts were directly or indirectly displayed in Pregnancy Pact , where is the glamorous life in those situations?
A huge problem that occurs in the United States is teen pregnancy. The highest rate of teen pregnancy belongs to the United States. Teen pregnancy costs over $5 billion yearly for the United States (“Teen Pregnancy Facts” Par.1). In a panic of what to do several teens go through an emotional crisis and turn to abortion or adoption. Most of the time these pregnancies are unplanned and teen’s are very unaware of the sexual education knowledge. When other teens view the unglamorous life of teen moms, they then decide to use better ways of prevention. The amount of teens giving birth have decreased over the past few decades, this is basically due “to increased availability of contraception and access to abortion, rather than a decrease in sexual activity” (“Teen pregnancy” par 1). I feel like this movie has a point of bringing about a dose of reality that can also be a part in many teen pregnancy campaigns.
I personally have friends that became moms at a young age. They always had a full plate on their hands once they became mothers. Most of them were able to finish high school but they did not get the chance to go to college, they couldn’t even take a course at a community college. Obstacles occurred when they were barely able to find jobs that they could maintain so they could support their children financially. They strongly depend on the support from their families and close friends. It’s like once they became mothers not only did their lives change, but they had to become a better person, a stronger person to be exact. My friend Shakeera Johnson told me “Motherhood seems so much easier from a far, but when you get up close and personal it’s a whole other story”. Struggles occurred constantly for a while, but they have basically gotten familiar with these hardships and responsibilities.
When many people look at movies, they kind of have a sense that less reality is going to come forth in the movie, even with movies that are based on a true story. If inspiration is to be found in the movie it can be captured in many different ways. A person can be inspired not to partake in a certain behavior in a movie, due to the consequences the movie presents. In the Lifetime presentation of Pregnancy Pact young girls are able to find inspiration in the movie. With the struggle and turmoil that the characters in the movie went through, I know many girls decided not to follow in their footsteps.
Sincerely,
Tekeya McDonald
Thursday, February 11, 2010
Reflection 1.1
I really enjoyed preparing this assignment. I spent some time researching and obtaining plenty of information on teen pregnancy. I presented my argument in a letter to the author of the editorial that I was rebutting. I started out by talking about the “Pregnancy Pact” and stating my claim. Then I stated my reasons by using statistical evidence, personal attributions, and a reality TV show as backgrounds. I received great feedback from my peers, and I greatly appreciate it. I was told that I used great sources and that my paper had a good structure to it. My peers liked how I stated my point of view and gave me ideas on how to make my paper even better. In my next draft I plan on focusing on adding a lot more information from my research. Not only do I want to add more statistics and information, but I also want to go more in depth with the evidence that I include. I was also told that I seem to be contradicting myself in this argument. When I write my next draft I plan on re-reading and editing my paper enough to make sure I am presenting my point of view correctly. I want to work hard to make sure I reach out to my audience enough, so when they are done reading my piece they don’t feel like my argument was left unsupported. I did my in-text citations in the correct format of MLA, but for my next draft I’m going to work on presenting my works cited page.
Sunday, February 7, 2010
Essay 1.1( No Glamour in Teen Pregnancy)
Dear Elizabeth Baugh,
On the night Lifetime premiered the original movie Pregnancy Pact viewers from every state, every college campus and every neighborhood were tuned in. Pregnancy Pact portrayed the realities of being a teen mom or basically just being a citizen of motherhood. The fact that it was inspired by a true story even made the story less glamorous; the movie screamed “these hardships can happen to you”.
In your editorial from The Breeze, I understood that you wrote A Perfectly Planned Pregnancy to claim that “Teen pregnancy was depicted as far more glamorous than it really is”. You felt that this movie was more than likely using its message to promote teen motherhood. I on the other hand, as well as many other viewers, did not see the so called glamour at all. A James Madison University student, Traffy Taylor, commented on your article stating that “everyone knows that having a baby at 15 is anything but glamorous”. Traffy Taylor disagrees with your claim based on her own view of the real world.
It’s a well known fact that the rates of teen pregnancy are pretty high. MTV’s Teen Mom is a reality show that shows the trouble and hardships of a few moms that are between the ages of 16 and 19. The moms in the show are constantly dealing with problems like not receiving support from their child’s father, balancing school and motherhood, and the option of giving up their child for adoption. Common statistics state that the chances of finishing high school or college is very unlikely for teen mothers, and a large percentage of teen mothers have to apply for welfare (“Statistics on Teen Pregnancy” par.5) Almost all of these facts were directly or indirectly displayed in Pregnancy Pact , where is the glamorous life in those situations?
I personally have friends that became moms at a young age. They always had a full plate on their hands once they became mothers. Most of them were able to finish high school but they did not get the chance to go to college, they couldn’t even take a course at a community college. Obstacles occurred when they were barely able to find jobs that they could maintain so they could support their children financially. They strongly depend on the support from their families and close friends. It’s like once they became mothers not only did their lives change, but they had to become a better person, a stronger person to be exact. Struggles occurred constantly for a while, but they have basically gotten familiar with these hardships and responsibilities.
When many people look at movies, they kind of have a sense that less reality is going to come forth in the movie, even with movies that are based on a true story. If inspiration is to be found in the movie it can be captured in many different ways. In the Lifetime presentation of Pregnancy Pact young girls are able to find inspiration in the movie. With the struggle and turmoil that the characters in the movie went through, I know many girls decided not to follow in their footsteps.
Sincerely,
Tekeya McDonald
On the night Lifetime premiered the original movie Pregnancy Pact viewers from every state, every college campus and every neighborhood were tuned in. Pregnancy Pact portrayed the realities of being a teen mom or basically just being a citizen of motherhood. The fact that it was inspired by a true story even made the story less glamorous; the movie screamed “these hardships can happen to you”.
In your editorial from The Breeze, I understood that you wrote A Perfectly Planned Pregnancy to claim that “Teen pregnancy was depicted as far more glamorous than it really is”. You felt that this movie was more than likely using its message to promote teen motherhood. I on the other hand, as well as many other viewers, did not see the so called glamour at all. A James Madison University student, Traffy Taylor, commented on your article stating that “everyone knows that having a baby at 15 is anything but glamorous”. Traffy Taylor disagrees with your claim based on her own view of the real world.
It’s a well known fact that the rates of teen pregnancy are pretty high. MTV’s Teen Mom is a reality show that shows the trouble and hardships of a few moms that are between the ages of 16 and 19. The moms in the show are constantly dealing with problems like not receiving support from their child’s father, balancing school and motherhood, and the option of giving up their child for adoption. Common statistics state that the chances of finishing high school or college is very unlikely for teen mothers, and a large percentage of teen mothers have to apply for welfare (“Statistics on Teen Pregnancy” par.5) Almost all of these facts were directly or indirectly displayed in Pregnancy Pact , where is the glamorous life in those situations?
I personally have friends that became moms at a young age. They always had a full plate on their hands once they became mothers. Most of them were able to finish high school but they did not get the chance to go to college, they couldn’t even take a course at a community college. Obstacles occurred when they were barely able to find jobs that they could maintain so they could support their children financially. They strongly depend on the support from their families and close friends. It’s like once they became mothers not only did their lives change, but they had to become a better person, a stronger person to be exact. Struggles occurred constantly for a while, but they have basically gotten familiar with these hardships and responsibilities.
When many people look at movies, they kind of have a sense that less reality is going to come forth in the movie, even with movies that are based on a true story. If inspiration is to be found in the movie it can be captured in many different ways. In the Lifetime presentation of Pregnancy Pact young girls are able to find inspiration in the movie. With the struggle and turmoil that the characters in the movie went through, I know many girls decided not to follow in their footsteps.
Sincerely,
Tekeya McDonald
Sunday, January 31, 2010
Rhetorical Analysis
In this editorial, Elizabeth Baugh, contributes her opinion in stating that the movie “The Pregnancy Pact” presented on Lifetime was not what she expected. She was unsatisfied with the movie, which she felt it did not do its job. Elizabeth claims that, “Teen pregnancy was depicted as far more glamorous” in this Lifetime presentation. She supports her claim with the reason that the movie concentrates more on a “way to get your boyfriend to never leave and love you forever”, and states that the movie doesn’t offer a solution to the teen pregnancy epidemic. A feeling of concern is expressed in her argument, she feels that an atmosphere that makes it ok to be a teen mom is presented. She uses refutation of evidence to create support for her argument. The body of her argument comes from taking quotes directly from the movie and even putting a website in her argument to provide actual statistics about teen pregnancy. Through her concerned tone of voice Elizabeth wants to capture a general audience of young teen girls and their parents as well, with a message more on the lines of don’t be fooled by this movie. No acknowledgement or response is provided in this argument; there is only one point of view that Elizabeth takes on. A lot of pathos is used in Elizabeth’s argument where the topic of being a teen mom is an emotional rollercoaster; there is the good and the bad, but a whole lot more good due to the “glamorous” lifestyle that can be fulfilled. She promotes her argument with the purpose to persuade young teens to not find false motivation or encouragement in this argument. The occasion that she uses is an essay about the television broadcast of “The Pregnancy Pact”, which a Lifetime original movie inspired by a true story.
Friday, January 29, 2010
Rebuttal Prewriting
When many people look at movies, they kind of have a sense that less reality is going to come forth in the movie, even with movies that are based on a true story. If inspiration is to be seeked in the movie it can be captured in many different ways. In the Lifetime presentation of Pregnancy Pact young girls are able to find inspiration in the movie. With the struggle and turmoil that the characters in the movie went through, I know many girl decided not to follow in their footsteps.
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